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Thursday, May 26, 2016

This week, the story tellers have been writing narrative stories. Enjoy!

A princess and a king Once upon a time there was a princess who lived in a kingdom. One day a princess came to a new kingdom and a king tried to kiss her. The princess ran away from the King. The king ran after her. Then the princess stops running and fainted. The king caught up to her and saw that she had fainted and took her to the hospital. In the end the princess had sprained her ankle but was not badly hurt. The princess was on crutches for 5 days. The king went back to his kingdom, and he didn’t chase the princess ever again.

Tuesday, May 3, 2016

cap leter

WALT: Write a letter to a camp parent or camp leader Use paragraphs for each new idea Use interesting words Edit our writing with a buddy to make it even better Reflect on our writing using a rubric If your parent went on camp, please write a letter to another person and give your own parent a big hug next time you see them. _______________________________________________________________________________ 14 / 3 / 2016 > Kauri / Rimu Yaldhurst Model School Christchurch > Dear John Hello John, my name is Lucy. I am from Yaldhurst School and I was in your group for stacking tyres. I would like to thank you for an awesome camp my first one . I thought you were helpful and funny. Things I enjoyed about the camp was Hanmer Spring Hot Pools both days my favourite bring Hydro-Slides and the lazy river. I also really liked the food we had it was really tasty from Rusty Carrot Catering. I really liked how you made people laugh, and I thought you were really smart. John I'd love to ask you some questions :) My camp this year was extremely exciting. I really enjoyed spending time with my friends, playing games, eating tasty food, and hanging out in the cabins. The thing I most enjoyed was not doing any homework. I would really like to thank you for such an amazing camp. I really like what you did for the school. Yours Sincerely Lucy Ebdon Marking My CAMP LETTER What I need to do Me / 5 Buddy / 5 Mr M / 5 1. PARAGRAPHS Each paragraph is about ONE main idea. 5 4 ? 2. SENTENCE STARTERS Sentences begin with different words. 4 5 ? 3. VOCABULARY The right words (key vocab) have been used to add detail and say exactly what you mean, and make sense. 3 3 ? 4. LANGUAGE Writing makes sense. My writing flows smoothly. 4 4 ? 5. PUNCTUATION Capitals are used when needed. Full stops are used at the end of sentences. EXTRA: Commas, question marks, speech marks and exclamation marks used in the right places ( . , ! ? " "). 5 4 ? 6. HOW DID I DO? Total points (of 25 points) 21 24 ? Me: Star and a wish Star: spelling Wish writing more Buddy: Star and a wish Star: I think you did a really good job explaining to me about your camp. Wish: I think that you could talk a little more about what you enjoyed. Mr M: Star and a wish Star: Wish: